The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?
It is very challenging for university administrators to budget their money, and there is always debate around this issue. While some prefer to spend all the budget on academic areas, In contrast, I believe that it is more beneficial for both university and students to spend more money on sports and athletic facilities. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint and provide details to illustrate my perspective.
First and foremost, it is widely accepted that maintaining a healthy life is of great importance. Students in the university are always studying and learning new things, and it is not easy for them to exercise. To be more specific, they have limited time to do sports, and even if they have, it is expensive for them to go to a gym. Therefore, it is crucial for the university to provide students with more athletic facilities and encourage them to exercise. Universities can help students to stay healthy by budgeting their money in better ways. Almost every individual agrees on the proverb, which says a sound mind is in a sound body. My own experience is a compelling example of this. While I was a university student, I spend most of my time sitting and studying. After one year, I was diagnosed with many problems because of not doing sports and exercises on a regular basis. At first, I wanted to go to a gym near my neighborhood, but it was very expensive. Fortunately our university specified a great amount of budget for the university's gym and other athletics facilities, so I had the opportunity to join the gym, and as a result, I could maintain a better lifestyle and healthier body. This example demonstrates how vital it is for universities to invest money in sports in order to improve students' health.
Furthermore, Doing sports is not only beneficial for students' physical health, but it also provides them with the opportunity to socialize. Students in the gym meet other students with different backgrounds and different fields of study. They can make friends and communicate with them. To be more specific, If universities provide students with athletic facilities and sports events, students are more likely to communicate. Take a personal experience as an example, while I was in university, as I mentioned in the above paragraph, I joined the gym in order to stay fit. But in fact, I could kill two birds with one stone since I was also talking with people there. At first, it was very hard for me to communicate because I was a shy person. After a while, I, as an introverted person, was able to talk with more people and hang out with them. Had I not joined the gym, I would not be able to improve my social skills and stay in shape besides my academic obligations.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that universities ought to budget sports and athletic facilities in order to improve students' lives. This is because it is more convenient and economical for students, and because it provides students with the opportunity to socialize. It is anticipated that authorities pay more attention to sports and budget more money in athletic facilities since it is more beneficial for students.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2606.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 537.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85288640596 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9304727704 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428305400372 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7144588991 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5185185185 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8888888889 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244054204502 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747819495309 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742729628718 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187027881314 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0713870598453 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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