Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Nowadays, the quick changing of the world has gotten impressive impacts on all aspects of lives such as jobs, relationships even salaries. Regarding this fact, there is a controversial question asking whether these changes make people upset or not. I'm afraid, I disagree with the idea which is expressing the lack of happiness and satisfaction for the people of the new era. The reasons to substantiate my idea are explored in the following.
First of all, new changes include new technology which makes the works of people easier than before. To put on the other hand, the people of the past had to spend a lot of time to do some hard duties that intensify the sense of tired and make the people unsatisfied. However, today people do not have to spend time on hard jobs and this event is an interesting happening. As an illustration, I am going to speak about my grandfather who used to work in farmland. He had been working there for several years until his wife passed away because of cancer. My grandfather told me “I am so sorry, I could not spend my time with her; I had to work every day for my family”. My grandfather felt sorry neither for not being kind nor for having bad behavior, rather, that was due to do not have enough time because of hard lives in the past.
Second, the variations in the new world and former have influenced not only the lives but also the relationship. To be specific, making relationships with the help of technology is a wonderful event for new people. It is crystal clear, our grandparents could make relationships with the people of their zone or their city, but people in these years have the chance to know everyone all over the world. These differences between now and yesterday indicate the positive effects which have to consider. A personal experience of mine can drive this fact home, my father has worked for a great company for four years, 4 years ago, while he was preparing to quit his job because of financial issue, he got familiar with LinkedIn, afterward, he put his resume on his page and later he could find a better job in another country. The social network strongly helped him in obtaining his new career that was at his research interest. If my father had lived in the past, he would not an opportunity to find a better job in another county.
By and large, I do believe the alternation in the new world is a great event for new people. Since these shifts let them have an easier life which did not happen before and spending more time with their family which prepares love. Also, it has major effects on having a relationship with people who live all over the world.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...these changes make people upset or not. Im afraid, I disagree with the idea which ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, so, while, such as, by and large, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2173.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59408033827 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58781729624 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517970401691 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3991743197 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.476190476 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5238095238 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215301698862 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695154520199 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561122073303 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145913229362 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0167078463155 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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