A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory.
Building of a new factory can have positive and negative effects on the community. It can pollute environment and create traffic problems. At the same time, it can economically benefit the town. If a company decides to build a factory in my community, I would support the idea. There are a few reasons why I feel this way.
First of all, new work places for community members could be created. Factory is a enormous entity, which needs a myriad of workers. People, who live in the town, can satisfied this demand. Moreover, some persons, who work far from the place they live, can save money on gas if they switch the job, and start working on the factory. My own experience illustrates it very well. I recall, that when I was a student, I had to work to support myself. At the time, the only job I could find was almost one hour driving from my house. Significant part of my salary I spend on gas. To that end, if my community had a factory nearby, I would have a chance to decrease my spending tremendously.
Secondly, opening of the factory is likely to bring other businesses to the town. Workers need to eat during their breaks. This way, new restaurants and grocery stores could be open in the town. Again, it would engender even more work places to the community members, and give an opportunity to local farmers to submit their products to the stores. For instance, recently, when a new shopping mall was built in my home town, scores of fast food restaurants were opened next to the mall. Therefore, employees of the mall had places to get food, and a lot of people find a job. To that point, my niece was working in one of the restaurants during her summer break. So, building of the factory could contribute to the development of the town.
To sum this up, I feel that building of the factory is advantageous for the community. This is because, it creates a variety of work places and helps to evolve the town. All things considered, it is reasonable to assume that factory will benefit the community.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 81, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54395604396 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57781329079 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516483516484 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.3543863843 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.16 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.56 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158303796027 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517456736285 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0738521802006 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130491636665 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0783036078226 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.2 11.7677419355 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 58.1214874552 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.1575268817 63% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.46 10.9000537634 78% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Try to use less pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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