Do you agree or disagree with the fallowing statement Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the fallowing statement?
Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.

In this era, with growing the connection ways due to the growing technology, the world become a village, people need to have communication with each other beyond their country boundaries. Thus learning about other countries' cultures can help us to have better job opportunities, study researches etc. There are distinctive ways to learn about different countries. Some people believe that museums may be a great source to be familiar with other countries while others not. I agree with this statement because of the fallowing reasons I will point out in next paragraphs.
First, we have different kinds of museums such as art museums, technological museums, and historical ones. In each sort of them, extensive information can be found with variety of books, brochures, tour leaders in them. As a matter of fact in each field of any country's introduction you can find a museum with divers source of information there at a short time. Thus visiting a museum wen you are visiting a country will be learning new things and spending pleasure time at the same time.
Second, audial learning can be remembered more easily than other type of learning. In museums you can see everything visually, so the information can be captured in your mind better and later you can recall them more conveniently. For example, when I traveled to Turkey, I visited the Sultan Suleiman museum where the living method of Osmani people was shown. I can remember exactly the number of kings, wars and other aspects of Turkish people in the time of Osmanian leadership in the country because I saw their palaces, clothes, pictures of their wars while I am not really good at my history courses.
Third, museums are built to visit, thus the people and government, thus the people and government in a society try their best to make them ready to teach something to the visitors so the contents that visitors are learning in them are reliable, they aren't distorted.
To sum up, I believe that museums are good places to become familiar with a country because they will demonstrate different aspects of a country, they convey information conveniently and their information is reliable.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 221, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...books, brochures, tour leaders in them. As a matter of fact in each field of any c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, really, second, so, third, thus, while, for example, sort of, such as, as a matter of fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 292.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95205479452 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69869967228 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578767123288 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3764542651 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.285714286 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296847542567 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105359225941 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603317711656 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172889167634 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725335006851 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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