Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world, where we live having friendships with other people is the most important factor of happiness. There has been a controversial debate among people being old and young as to whether making many friends is more beneficial than making fewer friend in a long time. As far as I am concerned, having some long-term friendship with small number of people is helpful, and two reasons to support my view point are presented as follows.
To begin with, making tong-term friend, individuals will be more likely to feel comfortable and enjoy the living. It is not a secret to anyone that its humans nature to communicate with their counterparts and maybe make a close friendship with some of them. Although everybody is interested in communicating all the time, they do not prefer to be close with all of them since different people have different personalities and point of views, which means humans definitely cannot have good relations with all people they meet. Making more and more friend s, we will put our mental health in danger since we are not be able to share our feelings with them; we are afraid of being judged because there was not enough time to get to know these kinds of friends completely. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was in high school, I made five friends immediately in a short time and they have their own especial way of thinking, beliefs, and behaviors. Since I did not adequate time to be familiar with their actual character, i did not realized that two of them are my enemies and they did not want me to be successful in my studies, which made me so upset. Had I devoted more time to make good friends and fewer ones, I would not have felt frustrated.
Furthermore, having intimate friends, who are being known for a long time, is the best blessing since we can share feelings. It is crystal clear that first impression is not reliable and we should know other in a long time because in this way we are able to start talking about different subjects and being informed of the attitudes and desires of our friends. by the passage of time we will share the most important issues like emotions which helps us to get the advantage of a good friends and get rid of all stress and anxieties since they are a mutual trust between us. No longer will we consider our friends as strange individuals, we will see them as our family, which is one of the biggest boon in everyone's life.
In sum, not only will we be able to feel better about ourselves, we will also are able to share feelings.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...debate among people being old and young as to whether making many friends is more beneficial ...
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Line 3, column 615, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ental health in danger since we are not be able to share our feelings with them; w...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...e familiar with their actual character, i did not realized that two of them are m...
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Line 3, column 1036, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'realize'
Suggestion: realize
... with their actual character, i did not realized that two of them are my enemies and the...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: By
...e attitudes and desires of our friends. by the passage of time we will share the m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, so, as to, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62715517241 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54047113183 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487068965517 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.7716456302 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.133333333 100.406767564 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.9333333333 20.6045352989 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.93333333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211637596169 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087592197893 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0568844255478 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131945388443 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108521819067 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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