Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answers.
There is no doubt that nowadays, happiness plays a key role in our life. Nobody can deny the influence of happiness on our daily lives. A controversial question which is often regarding this issue is that quick changes in the world make people less happy than people were in the past or not. Some people may hold this viewpoint that these quick changes have caused people unhappy and less satisfied. However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that quick changes in the world make people so happy and energetic. From my own perspective, the first belief is true; in what follows I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
One of the reasons coming to my mind at first is that changing quickly in the world makes people more stressful. Then, after a while they become depressed. Since they should always adapt themselves to these changes and try to be Up-To-Date, they feel tired and lose their peace as well. Moreover, if they don’t follow up with these rapid changes, they will lose some important things in their life such as a job, time and money. Therefore, as all of us know about people’s life in the past and their peace and happiness and just compare with today, unfortunately, these changes have negative points on people’s life. A very tangible example is spending a day with people who are over 50 years old that they have lived in the past and compare them to people who are about 30 years old. You can see the second group is really depressed and dissatisfied.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that when everything changes rapidly, people become busier in comparison with their life in the past. Because they always have things to do to stay tuned in this technological world. As a result, they don’t have memorable events or moments with each other which are making them happy and youthfulness. In addition, they become alone after years and just live such as a robot. It could be unfair not to mention that the more income and ease people gain in the technological world, the more peace and happiness they would lose through these changes in their lives. Eventually, people cannot euphoric like in the past. Then; I think more income and easement cannot be an appropriate and valuable alternative for joy and happiness.
To wrap it up, it is my deep belief that, regrettably people lose their satisfaction and happiness because of these rapid changes in the world. All in all, it is anticipated that people can find some solutions to become happy and satisfied in the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...comparison with their life in the past. Because they always have things to do to stay t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, really, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, i think, in addition, no doubt, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83446712018 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53589367522 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503401360544 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.141536409 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9090909091 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0454545455 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72727272727 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326196355917 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0947584542897 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699858813161 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207498807224 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250965971744 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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