Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education in a country is to increase teachers’ salaries.
With the labor-intensive economy giving its way to education- focused economy, the issue of education and its quality has become an issue of broad interest. That increasing teachers' salaries is the best way to enhance the quality of education in a country has become a real challenge to many governments. In this regard, some hold the notion that raising the teacher's stipend can help with increasing the quality of education. whereas some hold an alternative perspective. They believe that other factors, such as the use of state-of-the-art technology, can contribute to ameliorating education more effectively. In this respect, I contend with the former group for several reasons, some of which are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, several factors concerning the quality of education have tantamount weight and role as teachers. For instance, the infrastructure of the educational system has a lot to say with the quality of education and the students' literacy. Previously, the teaching system was based on memorizing the rules and facts. Students had to remember the dates of historical events, the laws concerning physical and chemical phenomena, and generally everything. Studies have shown that a memorizing-based learning strategy is not only not helpful but also discourages students. The results of a study in a European country have revealed students who benefit from a pragmatic education style, trying to understand the concepts and learning by conducting experiments or through the use of simulations with state-of-the-art technology, perform considerably better than those students who spend several hours in conventional classrooms, trying to memorize every piece of information without knowing its application. Thus, merely increasing the teachers' salary and expecting a boost in education quality, just because teachers are motivated enough, is neither sufficient nor a sensible course of action. In other words, the essence and the fundamentals of a structure, in this case, the educational system, must be correct for the other parts, the teachers' work, to be practical.
Furthermore, the other problem with the educational system is its treats all the students the same without giving a chance for different skills to burgeon and flourish. By this, I mean that all the students, regardless of their interests, skills, and capability, are forced to study some predetermined subjects, such as math, chemistry, and literature, and they are evaluated from an entrenched point of view. However, to our knowledge, not everybody has the same skills. Some are good at math, while others are good at art, and scaling students based on fixed metrics brings nothing but disappointment for students. Hence, governments should develop a framework to identify each individual's talents and help them flourish. For instance, a friend of mine was a professional pianist but was not good at subjects like math and science. However, because of the extant educational system, she had to take those subjects and always was treated as a weak student. Once she migrated to a country where she could pursue her passion, music, at an academic level, she became more confident. Now she is an eminent composer who also teaches at well-known colleges. Levying the burden on the teachers without constructing the correct education system brings nothing but more failure and maybe a dire economic state. Because teachers compromise a significant number of the workforce, increasing their income without careful consideration can harm the economy.
To recapitulate all, I believe trying to enhance the education of any given country by increasing the teachers' salary while the whole educational system is constructed on the loose ground is not plausible. Using new technology and shifting from a memorizing-based system to a function-focused system can be more influential while detecting students' talents and putting them on the right path is also the second wing toward this enhancement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
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Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'teachers'' or 'teacher's'?
Suggestion: teachers'; teacher's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, so, thus, well, whereas, while, for instance, i mean, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3394.0 1977.66487455 172% => OK
No of words: 623.0 407.700716846 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44783306581 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.99599519102 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12412335789 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 311.0 212.727598566 146% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.499197431782 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 1062.9 618.680645161 172% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.1864868856 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.703703704 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0740740741 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96296296296 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229996148069 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659153648549 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0848421378913 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159683447713 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0858250377459 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 164.0 86.8835125448 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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