Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
History of mankind reveals stories of human beings living together as one family. Initially there was lack of houses and humans spent time together in caves and forest trees. As time progressed, he built houses and accommodated everyone possible. The misunderstandings and fights of men and women mostly led them to lead a worse life causing differences of opinions. thus, I concur with the fact that the extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past for the reasons provided in the essay below.
Divisions occurred because of man formulating certain rules and regulations. As a result of this, women after marriage moved on to live with her husband and in-laws. hence, the family comprised of the lady together with her partner’s family consisting of his parents, grandparents and siblings. With the advent of technology and women going to work, the problem of ego arises in every individuals mind and hence the extended family is split into a family with fewer members.
Furthermore, it can be noticed that a greater number of women today are working professionals and hence demand equal rights from their husbands and in-laws. she is not able to concentrate on the house-hold chores and thus not able to satisfy the needs of the house that she has moved into. The older generation find it difficult to digest such motives which in turn lead to conflicts. For example, men take rest after coming from office whereas a lady is expected to take care of others and cooking food for them. As she is also tired, this causes stress for her in turn affecting the whole family. As a solution to this problem, the couples find a different house and live separately.
Moreover, technological advancements have further increased the distance between relatives. For example, in early days, social gatherings and get togethers were common. But nowadays, people are very busy to find time that they just opt for video chats rather than meeting a person face to face. Elderly people are considered as a burden and hence they are made to go to old age centers. Similarly, problems faced by uncles and aunties are not interfered since they are treated as a different family. With a tightly packed schedule, no body finds time even to greet or help others.
For the above-mentioned reasons, I agree to the statement. The joy of sharing food, fond memories and togetherness eventually diminished and the value of a human got reduced due to their pride and anger resulting in the joint families to separate into nuclear ones.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: As time passed
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...rights from their husbands and in-laws. she is not able to concentrate on the house...
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...family. With a tightly packed schedule, no body finds time even to greet or help others...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, similarly, so, thus, whereas, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2163.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99538106236 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73951290487 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59584295612 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.827182418 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0434782609 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8260869565 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.30434782609 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151309689834 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383130495608 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.089682045229 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0839575365544 0.150856017488 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757338742238 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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