Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Being famous it means that whatever it comes with that title should be handled carefully by these people. It is thought by some that prominent people used to have more privacy in the past than they have today. Nevertheless, In my opinion, famous people should have more privacy then they had in the past. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore as follows.

The first reason why famous entertainers should have their privacy more protected is because their job has given them the opportunity to be known world wild. As a result of that they should have a different approach when it comes to their behavior in public, which in these cases should be always controlled and perfect. Ordinary people or fans who admire their famous people tend to imitate them in everything they do. If they behave wired in an unprecedented way, that would cause them a lot of problems. For example, recently I read an article on the Entertaining magazine, which wrote about the bad behavior of the singer Britney Spears, while she was partying with her friend in a local bar. Actually, that magazine had another colon where her fans had posted their opinions about that behavior. After they counted how many fans were pro and how many were against that behavior.The magazine has reached the conclusion that the singer’s reputation was in danger just because of her lack of self-behavior in public. That is why I think that even though prominent people may be sometimes careless about how they behave in their private life, their privacy should be kept in order to not affect their reputation as artists.

Secondly, it is important to consider the fact that the renown people are just as everybody else. They have the right to be treated as normal human beings, where they do have flaws. No one is perfect in this world. But because they have their talents that distinguish them from others, it does not mean that their privacy should not be counted as to be held properly as it is supposed to be. For example, many people think that well-known people should know in advance that as far as they are famous they should not ask for privacy, their admires should know everything about their life. On the other hand, privacy is a right of every person in a civilized society, so that they should have their own right to keep their private life, private. Overall, I believe that as humans we should see each other as equal, despite the differences on our titles that we hold.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, as to, for example, i feel, i think, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 26.0 11.0286738351 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71593533487 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37816759992 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498845265589 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9263767107 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.473684211 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7894736842 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.84210526316 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185549919859 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073436907171 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0813721532433 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162848860719 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583355474407 0.0645574589148 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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