Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As our media grows, we can see many contents associating with the lives of famous people; and at the same time, their privacies are decreased. So, here comes an issue whether those celebrities deserves more privacy in modern society? In my view, from the perspective of human right and the influence of this culture, I maintain that famous people should have more privacy.

Admittedly, those people such as movie stars or famous athletes are popular in the public, it is our nature that has curiosity to know more about them. Therefore, the paparazzi and correspondents naturally record and broadcast their lives and events. However, this is not the pretense to impede their private lives.

To begin with, privacy is a basic right of human-beings, it is unjustifiable to deem those celebrities as exception. In other words, famous people are also humans, who enjoy the same basic perquisite. If we easily spurn this bottom line, how we maintain the consistence standard of the law? And how we keep a country in order? Hence, famous people deserve more privacy because by this mean we are protecting the human right.

Furthermore, the culture of intruding celebrities lives will erode the morale value of public people. To be specific, the the news coverage of those people usually consist of sordid contents, which are inappropriate for children and lower the ethos in the society. For instance, paparazzi usually film the events like extra-marital relationship or disseminate the material like porn video related to a singer or actors to win the popularity or click-on rate of their news. As a result, our society is teemed with this lower-level material and gradually people's mind will be tainted by these content.

To sum up, endowing more privacy to famous people helps the society maintain a consistence standard and also prevents the morale value of the public from being vitiated.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...he morale value of the public from being vitiated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, for instance, such as, as a result, in my view, in other words, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11575562701 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7353575096 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.569131832797 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1725899578 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.4375 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.875 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120982950254 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407036903679 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424995859683 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0738686858439 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477782589214 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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