Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays more than ever, the right of privacy in this modernized world we live in is becoming more than an issue specifically for celebrities, who people are avidly follow their news and try to imitate. While many believe that it is completely normal for celebrities that every detail of their life have been shared with media, others disagree with this, saying that due to the technological advances and access to the internet, they deserve to have more privacy than they experience now. I would prefer to argue that, I strongly believe they need more privacy, and I will explore my reasons in the following essay.
To begin with, famous people like every other people deserve to have the right of privacy. And the position of people should not be the concern whether they deserve it or not. Privacy is on the basic and fundamental of human rights, and everyone regardless of their status has to be entitled to. Since a person is a famous athletes and make a lot of contribution to society does not mean that every single detail of their life should be broadcast on news and social networking websites. It is generally accepted that popular people making an excellent role model for ordinary people, and due to this desire, media tends to obtain more and more detail of different part of their life to sell to public as a common knowledge which is literally an invasion of privacy.
Furthermore, like all of us, celebrities have family and friends all of whom are ordinary people and they might not want to be in pictures of news and social media. it is crystal clear that, celebrities choose to be famous, but their family and friends have not get to pick to share their daily life. therefore, it is crucially important to respect people’s privacy and give them the opportunity to choose, whether they are willing to be in picture of media or rather be excluded and live in a safe zone. Now, it is becoming a general trend that celebrities try to eliminate their children from social media and paparazzi, and let them to live a normal life, which is positive step in educating people in order to respect their privacy.
In conclusion, I believe that, undoubtedly famous people deserve to have more privacy. This is because privacy is one of the basic and fundamental right of all humans regardless of their status, and due to the access to the internet they are more than ever facing invasion of privacy. Moreover, celebrities' family and friends are ordinary people that have to be given the right whether they want to be in this picture of social media or prefer to live a normal life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, as to, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71806167401 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51482823259 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433920704846 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.56928604 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.8 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2666666667 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220944180014 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0923414454985 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0669764148448 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165053594703 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0835403203061 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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