Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Law today globally give the rights to all people in all nations to secure their privacy whatever are their fields of carrier, education, and etc. People who works in certain fields as athletes and actors many times they been used as advertisment objects. This due to the fact that certain companies need to increase the percentage of people who watching and follow them. Why? all know the answer which is the company get money from this process and even some of the famous people get their promotion to aveal their private information. I personally believe if its upon the owe of the actor who don not want to aveal his private information. We should respect that. And provide the maximum privacy for them for several reasons.
To begin with, it is their own business. They deesrve our respect to the decession they make. They deserve it legally; therefore, many well known people today keep their secrets and family buisness away from their works. For instance, government in my back home support the privacy of all of famous people. If ofr some reasons the entertainmnets want to aveal certain information, they needs to have asigned legal papers for acceptance of these famous people to announce their own private information. I recomend to be this taken place in all countires .
In additoin, the announcement about their privatinformation surely will have a negative impact on thier children or even on their future works. For example, the last announcement about legal devorce of Anglina Julley, the famous actor, from Brad Bit, her husband, Famous actor too, effect their adapting children anourmoucely. Inturn, one of her adapted kids cry a lot in public since she get known this unfortunitly news fro m the advertisemnet when she watch TV. This later effect her psychology; therefore, i strongly recomend that these advertisment should first take permission from the famous person if they want to aveal his personal information to public. They take on hans all responsibiblty of harming this incent child and all consequent effect later on all Juliai's family.
Inconclusion, i strongly agree that the well known opeople should enjoy thier personal life and all belong's secrets as much as they want to do so because it is legalto keep their secrets un announced, as it is their owe buisness and to prevent any harm to their families.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, therefore, well, even so, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00510204082 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.680663691 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535714285714 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.3304025957 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.263157895 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6315789474 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123900252335 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0405976713484 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0311316634007 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0798875186929 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0385099500082 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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