Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
since the dawn of humanity, there was a contovercial debate among the fact that the government should invest on which kinds of activities to have more graceful for all citizens. In this line of theought, some people are of the opinion that the government should spend money on athletic activities, since it directly relates to health of people. In contrast, I subscribe to the view that the art has played a crucial role in the progress of human life. I feel this for two main reasons. In the following paragraphs, my ideas will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, it is no secret to the fact that indviduals should foster not only physically but also mentally; the art contributes to gorwing mentaly. generally speaking, the art merge with emotions and feelings. it stimulates one part of the brain which relates to the peoples' personality. To delve more into it, the more emotions people struggle, the more attention people pay to others. Therefore, the rate of vilience and aggressivness will reduce. For instance, there is no evidence for this situation that an artist kill others, or insoalt other people. All in all, with investing to art, the quality of life will heighten and individuals learn to car about their society.
Another reason is that with supporting arts, the government can earn money because great artists will raise and when they create a masterpice of art, the governmet can sell it in international trades. Hence, the economice’s beneficial would be a salient factor for a society that wants to foster arts and artists. Take this situation as an example. Nowadays, many conserts hold throughout the world; people tend to participate them even if they force to go abroad. For a society like US, encoraging their residents to nurture in this realm of study, it would be a siginificant opportunity to make money from arts.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, although there are several exceptions excluded from general rules, I believe that The government should support arts rather than sports. Not only do people with artistic senses grow well-behaved, but arts also aim to improve the econimics and making money for country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1832.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99182561308 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7145721011 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58583106267 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 571.5 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5459829914 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4210526316 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3157894737 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78947368421 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198839845431 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517654388586 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534036974038 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127021204557 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444875125427 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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