Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state—sponsored Olympic teams.
It goes with out saying that governments are responsible to provide facilities for people in a society to live a peace ful life. In this regard, many people beleive that the government should allocate more money to suppoer the arts rather than athletics. In contrast, some others hold an opposite view, stating that governments shoul focus more on the athletic issues than the arts. I personally concur with the first group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraph.
First of all, since the arts is attributes to whole of people in a society rather than a specific group, government should sped more money supporting that. In fact, all people who are living in a country involve in art activities. Some people are artists and need sopport to exhibit their works, and some other like the art and could acheive a sense of relaxation by participating in places related to art activities. Therefore, the government should focus on the issues in which whole of people are involved and allot more money to them, because the government is responsible for all people and the budget of government allocate to all stage of people. As an example, my grand mother does not have any intrest to sport and athletic events, while attending to art exhibitions positively affect on her sprite; consequently, she enthosiastically involved in art activites. it shows that arts are dedicated to whole range of age people rahter than a definit group of them.
Secondly, arts helps people to increse their creativities and release their tension and strains. In fact, in today's hectic life people strongly need activites to seperate them from any anexity and stress. Participating in art activities, such as art exhibitions, musical concert, and theather, to name but a few, dramatically results in creation of the sense of happiness and enhance their abilities to overcome their difficulties with which confront in daily life. My experience, as an example, could shed light on this concept. When I was student, I was under pressure of thesis's works and I was nervous. I strongly need a space to help me to be relax. In this hard situations, I decided to participate a piano concert to decrease my stress and be relaxed to compelete my thesis in an effective and proficient manner.
To conclude, the government should spend more money to suppodt of arts rahter than athletics. Not only does it allocate to whole of people in a society and all stages of people could gain from it, but also in have many positive effect on their relaxation and helps them to release from stress and daily tentions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 9, Rule ID: WITH_OUT
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
It goes with out saying that governments are responsible...
Line 7, column 788, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
...attending to art exhibitions positively affect on her sprite; consequently, she enthosias...
Line 7, column 872, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
...osiastically involved in art activites. it shows that arts are dedicated to whole ...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in contrast, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93665158371 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76924278381 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486425339367 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.2800481961 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.842105263 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2631578947 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.26315789474 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217365530952 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074196180785 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826337864962 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143495870527 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663800955746 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.