Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over the past few decades, Governments spend a lot of their budget to support the variety of subjects, like arts and sports activities. Most of the people of the community, especially doctors and scientists, believe that the politicians have to advocate more money to support athletics. Personally speaking, I, on the other hand, believe that spending money on the arts is more advantageous for society. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will elaborate in the following essay.
To begin with, governments can acquire a large amount of money from spending money on different parts of the arts. Most of the countries in the world make a hoard of the funds from producing movies, exhibit paintings, and other activities that related to the art since they had advocated a lot of their budget to the arts. As far as I am concerned, If governments spend their money on supporting arts, this money will be earned in the following years. Therefore, with spending money on arts, government make new ideas to make money. For instance, India is one of the countries that has spent a lot of money to improve its movies. As a matter of fact, India is the second country in the world after America that spend money to support its film industry. These days, after several years of spending money, the film industry of India that is named Bollywood makes a hoard of money for India.
Secondly, countries can use arts to introduce their culture to other parts of the world. It is apparent that if governments advocate more money to the arts, more people in the world become familiar with their arts. To be more specific, governments can use this opportunity to spread their culture to other countries on Earth. It is worth mentioning that it is very beneficial for a country to spread their culture because if people become familiar with a foreign culture, and they like it, they will try to travel to that country, or even migrate to that country which both of them are advantageous for the country. The former helps the governments to earn a large amount of money, and the other is beneficial since it can help them to attract most ingenious people of the world in that country that is very helpful in every aspect.
By way of conclusion, I strongly believe that it is more beneficial for the both of the governments and the public to spend more money on arts rather than spend money to support activities that related to the sport. This is because not only can the governments earn a lot of money from this but also it helps them to introduce their culture to foreign nations.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i feel, as a matter of fact, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2124.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67841409692 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5530107182 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.394273127753 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.9618063375 48.9658058833 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2222222222 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225485344634 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944560357827 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661331623838 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170090403481 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498260259341 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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