Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
There is a constant argue between people on amount of the money that governments spend for each organization. In my opinion, among the art and state-sponsored Olymian teams, it is better for government to support the former. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my view point.
First of all, Olympics teams usually have extra sources of support, such as private companies and organizations. In fact, Olympics teams are heavily advertised due to their appearience in broadcasting medias such as televisions and the internet, consequently these companies are tend to sponser Olympic teams to have chance to introduce their products widely. As a matter of fact, this opportunity makes Olympics teams needless of government's finacial help. I remember that my brother was in swiming team of Iran in Rio 2016 Olympics, and there were a lot of companies that aimed to sponser their team for the Olympics. Consequently, they didn't have any financial problems and they weren't dependant on gevernment financial aids.
Furthermore, governments should invest on sections that would help to the social cultural growth of their people. While Olympic teams are important for each countries advancement, the art play a more important role in educating people, especially younger ones. If government spent more money on art sections, there will be more precious art galleries and institutions for educating people on different art subjects. My own experience demonstrates this situation. Four years ago, when I was a high school student, we used to visit an art museum near our school for our history class. This chance, helped us significantly in deeper understanding of our country's art history and how cultural factors could be effective on different art styles. Had government not spended money on constructing that museum, we would not have been able to gain that much of knowledge in history class.
To conclude, I firmly believe that it is more beneficial for both people and governments to support the arts rather than sthletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. This is due to the fact that not only Olympic teams are sponsered by private companies, but also they are not as important as the arts in cultural growth of the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, so, while, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1915.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20380434783 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94799636989 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.467329189 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.647058824 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.41176470588 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259466585698 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087097169184 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930807915031 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1776653674 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0716443552067 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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