Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in sponsoring arts than in athletics (like state Olympics team).
Some people expect governments to put money to support art while, others thinks that that money should spend on support of athletics like state-sponsored Olympic teams. I, myself, believe that it is rational to put money on art and artistic fields. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss my reasons.
To begin with, the culture of a country is defined by the art history of that country, and by putting money on this field, you can plan to empower this field for the next generation. When you want to know about a history of a country, you search for some art things such as paintings, books, or maybe poems. These things help you familiar with the culture of a country. Hence, if you put money on this field, you will can save this kind of things as a document of your country's art history. For instance, France is known as an artistic country around the world. These facts are vividly shown in the architecture of the buildings, poems, story books, and even their paintings.
On the other hand, when you put money on art, you can find some skilled people on this field, and by introducing him to the world can prove how your country rich in that field. For most countries it is important to known as an artistic country. As a result, they need some special art to fascinate people around the world. So, they need to teach some skilled people how produce universal artistic paintings, movies, books. For example, all of us heard about Leonardo Da Vinci as a professional painter around the world. His famous is mostly because of his great work named Mona Lisa painting. These painting is famous widely around the world and by this, people always remember Italy is a rich country in art by having these kind of persons. So if we try to put money to rise these kind of skilled persons, we will be have famous around the world as a long period of time.
In conclusion, I strongly recommend that governments should spend their money on art. Therefore, they can strengthen their history, and be popular in the world by introducing new artistic persons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, may, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1698.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65205479452 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46291160439 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479452054795 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.5165360035 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3684210526 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84210526316 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196156732048 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0663571739559 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857945311733 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154255345355 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0940701278937 0.0645574589148 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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