Do you agree or disagree with following statement? if people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this competitve job markets everyone try to land job which be appropriate with their situations and their goals. Many people think taking a job that is secure is more important than wait for a job that would be satisfing.On other hand, others perfer to be patient till find a better job that is favorable. I personally hold the first view. in the following paragraph, I will delve into most conspicuous reasons and examples justifing my point of view.
first, due to the complexity of modern era, finding a job is very hard. the population has increased dramaticlly over the last decades, artificial intelligence have occupied most positions and many jobs which used to be , nowadays are disappeard; therefore positions of jobs that are available will be desired by many candidates. So if we could find a secure job we should defenitly accept it , because we might be unable to find our favorite or dream work. for example in many countries that are involved with a lot of economic crisis, many people don't even have the chance of landing a simple job such as waiter or salesperson. Thus, I believe that it's better idea to get this job and then also pursue our dreams as well.
second, satisfing with a job is mostly imagination of our mind. this satisfaction sometimes will be so unsustainable.if you ask a vast majority of people,who achived their dream work,whether they satisfied with their work now, I bet most of them will tell no! and also if you ask people who have secure job this question, they will say yes!! because secure jobs don't have a lot of perssure and stress. people may at first be disappointed, but eventually they will be so glad. for example my father was a bank employer, he had much time to spend with his family and he was relaxed and calm without worry about his future career. although he wanted to be a businessman, he is realy happy that he didn't wait for it. since he couldn't bear that much stress as a business man specially during several recession that our country had faced them.
In conclusion, I highly recommend that people should get a secure job right away, due to being hard to find a job and the benefits of secure job that will offer to people who choose it.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63010204082 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63768600513 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548469387755 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.7280289919 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.4375 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4375 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.5376344086 433% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.357225403451 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109886260088 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.081171042363 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242709234789 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449964998477 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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