Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of whether that is better for children to choose a similar job that their parent’s jobs is very controversial. On one side, supporters of the idea believe that children should choose similar jobs as their parents. They could benefit from this. On the other hand, critics of this maintain that if children decide to work in a similar as their parents they could be unhappy for the rest of their life. However, after a very careful consideration I maintain the opinion that children should choose similar jobs as their parents, for a few reasons which I will explain below.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that children should follow the steps of their parents. This could be a quite advantageous for them. In fact, children will feel support from their parents because they are in the same field. A vivid example to shed light on what I mentioned above is that I chose the same job as my dad. He is dentist and since I was a kid I wanted to study the same career as him. Growing up I realize that this has been my dream and now I can test it. Choosing the same occupation as my dad has benefited enormously because he has his own dental office in which I am working as a dentist. Also, as all the patients know that I am her daughter, they will trust on me as they trust on my father.
The second reason which is worth some thought, is that I did not have to spend a lot of money building my own practice. Now the business is a family business because we work together as a college. Instead, many children that prefer different jobs as their parents have to invest great sum of money to start their business, but this was not my case. The importance of having the same job as your parents is than when you have any issue, your parents could take your place and faced the problem for you. That is why I decided to take the same profession as my dad because I knew he will support me in every moment of my life.
To wrap up, I strongly believe that choosing the same profession or job that our parents will always allow us to succeed, indeed it is a great decision and it will be worthy to excel in our occupation
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.34577114428 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37046404207 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467661691542 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 540.9 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2154479346 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9473684211 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380831575802 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120922300642 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139183405462 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229811049938 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137519457973 0.0645574589148 213% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 58.1214874552 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.95 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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