Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose
Jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue of whether it is better for children to follow their parent’s career or not aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked would agree with the statement that following the parent’s job is a wiser choice for children, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I postulate the benefit of choosing jobs similar to our parents far outweigh different one. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that children can use their parent’s experiences to be successful in their careers. In this competitive world, there are many troublesome situations in the workplace that people should deal with. By use of parent’s experiences, they can pass these tough time without any losses. For instance, if a young man wants to increase the profit of his store, he can take some useful pieces of advice from his father how to make more money, since his father had already tested many ways and some of them might not be useful. As a result, he can avoid repeating his father mistake and choose a logical way to prevent difficulties such as fail and bankruptcy.
In approaching this issue apart from the reason given above, another reason that deserves some words is that this attitude boosts the chance to gain great achievements in their career. As they do not need to start their businesses out of nothing. Consequently, they can easily improve significantly in their job compared with their competitors who want to start their work from the small origin. For example, many well-known brands in different fields usually established by a person in the past and their children progress their father’s job. Azimi carpet which is the nationally and internationally famous founded 90 years ago by Mr. Azimi and his sons follow this career and they could readily spread the brand not only in our country but also over the world because the foundation of this job created and they only worked to make it better in quality and outlook to make it popular as a high-quality brand in the carpet industry.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that following the parent’s career assist children to use their parent’s experience and prevent from some negative consequences. Moreover, they need to begin out of nothing and with this way, they can focus on progressing their job.
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...h-quality brand in the carpet industry. By the way of conclusion, based on the a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, look, moreover, so, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, such as, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9718969555 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84117702897 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531615925059 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.344602268 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.6875 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6875 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407766475985 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138730284829 0.076458572812 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088145218196 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2661776794 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0854838195384 0.0645574589148 132% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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