Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
It goes without saying that in this competitive world where we live, children are overwhelmed with different concerns to be prosperous in their future jobs. In this regard, while some people believe that children should choose to follow their parent's jobs, others hold the opposite view. I, personally, concur with the former group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, today, children have more options to choose one of them as their jobs. To clarify, in the past, there were a few jobs so that people had to choose among them; therefore, parents had to make a choice one of the limited options even if they did not like it. So, they often followed their parent's work. However, now thanks to the development of technology and increasing people's need, many works are available for children to take among them. Then, kids have more job opportunities, and their options do not be limited to a few tasks. For example, my father tells me about his childhood. He did not like farming, which was my grandfather's job. So he looked for any job in which he could be prosperous in their village, but he could not found it and had to choose his father's work as a job. On the other hand, I am an accountant because the world faces new needs, and accountancy is one of them.
Secondly, by taking a different job from parent's one, parents cannot intervene in ways in which their kids do work. To clarify, parents always want to help their kids by telling their own experience as, but sometimes this kind of behavior can bother their children. Most of the kids want to deal with their own problems by themselves and do not want their parent's advice. They want to experience everything, especially something related to their work, by themselves. Therefore, taking different works with their parent's ones can prevent parent's interferences.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned above into account, I do believe that it would be better for children to do different work in comparison with the parent's job. This is because not only they have more options to take one of them as a job, but also taking different jobs prevents parents from intervening in their children's work manner.(36 min)
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80829015544 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58128870084 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50518134715 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0158404641 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6842105263 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448564868557 0.236089414692 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15162778853 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878456410287 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293900556988 0.150856017488 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641692520128 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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