Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having appropriate knowledge is one of crucial pillar of success in human’s life. Generally, people arrange among their level of knowledge in society and gain respect through their amount of information which means higher data provide people with higher social level and respect. Some people believe that expanding knowledge through various academic subjects is better than being specialize in one topic, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, people would benefit a lot by vast their information in different fields for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that by increasing knowledge in various areas people could make better decisions. When people deal with large amount of information in diversity fields, they could get familiar with different prospective which provide them with valuable experience and get them out from blindness. Undoubtedly, a well-rounded person could make logical decisions in dilemma. For example, few years ago I wanted to buy a car which could both work efficiently and cost me less. Since I studied mechanical engineering in university, I had several information about mechanical part of machines. Also, during education I decided to attended in management workshops which provided me with experience about the cost of various cars. As I had vast knowledge in different fields, I could make a logical decision and chose the best car. This experience taught me that expanding knowledge would have a lot of advantages.
Second, people who gain information in various subjects have more success in their future career. Being interested in one’s job is one of the important pillar of prosperity in career. Every person could find their real interest by getting involve in diversity academic subjects. For instance, statistics show that prosperous people in their job have strong background in knowing different subjects. Researchers' investigation demonstrates that as these people didn't restrict themselves in one field, they get familiar with various aspects which not only giving them the opportunity to find their real interest, but also they could solve the problems better. As you can see, people with vast knowledge have more success in future.
In conclusion, I do believe that gaining information in several academic topics has positive effect in people's life. Not only could people make better decisions, but they also will be more successful in their future job. I think each person should pay more attention in obtain various knowledge.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 538, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some information'.
Suggestion: some information
...anical engineering in university, I had several information about mechanical part of machines. Also...
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Line 9, column 465, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ation demonstrates that as these people didnt restrict themselves in one field, they ...
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Line 9, column 724, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...e with vast knowledge have more success in future. In conclusion, I do believe that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4427480916 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77458252344 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519083969466 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0000723693 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.857142857 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.90476190476 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14175875509 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484477664944 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455943731731 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0918838853122 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358773800107 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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