Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Through the years, a question which is matter of debates, a controversial one, is, wether it`s important to know about events that occured arouf the word or not. It`s a little hard to reach a consensus about this issue, however, in numerous circles of experts and researchers, whereas some are inclined toward the opinion that, it`s essential to be aware about events happening around the world. On the other extreme of the rope, opponents believe, it`s not important to konw what happend around the word. Wile both sides have their own position, from my vantage point, the latter attitude carries more weight. I will explain bellow.
To begin, the first point I`d like to make is that, events, specially disasters or bad news distract you from your activities. Bad news can influence to you and make you upset. Let me illustrate that in other word. Last month I whatched a news about killing young people and child by savages. I always remember that news and pictures and they don`t let to me focus on my lessones when I want to study.
The second reason coming to my mind to substantiates and indicates my stand point concerning this issue is that, news can be brings addict and get lots of your time for spending on it. My father`s experience is a compeling example that what I mean. My father is a news addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the news, read about or what the news channel such as, BBC, VOA and etc. I believe he can spend his time on other activities instead of news. For example, read books, go the gym or even watch any thing else on tv, like, National Geography in order to increase his knowledge.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exception which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that, it`s not important to spend your time on news and events happening around the world. To recapitulate the reasons, not only news and awarness about your around world distract you from your mainl activity, but, prevent you to spending your time on practical activities. Also you may become news addicted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'news'.
Suggestion: news
...at in other word. Last month I whatched a news about killing young people and child by...
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Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'since the wake'?
Suggestion: since the wake
...hat I mean. My father is a news addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the...
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Line 5, column 292, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wakes'.
Suggestion: wakes
...n. My father is a news addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the...
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Line 5, column 313, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...s addict, since he wake up until night. he always listen to the news, read about o...
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Line 5, column 323, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'listens'.
Suggestion: listens
...since he wake up until night. he always listen to the news, read about or what the new...
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Line 5, column 397, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...what the news channel such as, BBC, VOA and etc. I believe he can spend his time on othe...
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Line 5, column 525, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anything'?
Suggestion: anything
...e, read books, go the gym or even watch any thing else on tv, like, National Geography in...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ding your time on practical activities. Also you may become news addicted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, second, so, whereas, for example, i mean, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79726027397 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49499555406 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569863013699 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3301014859 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1578947368 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26315789474 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199264682931 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0575042421354 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602549487548 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128321641782 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0789611398896 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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