Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Generally speaking friends make our lives colorful and meaningful. It is thought by some people that it is more important to keep our old friends close and never exchange them with the new ones. They believe that making new friends would shift their attention toward the old friends. However, I firmly believe that making new friends is as important as having the old ones. I feel this way for two reasons, which I would explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, it is essential to have new friends because they would come to your life in a time when you need them the most. People tend to make new friends when they are in a position in their lives that they need them. For example, my experience is a compelling illustration of this. A decade ago, when I came to the United States, I did not have anyone close to me. I wanted to make friends as soon as I could. I started to build new friendships with my co-workers, which helped me to feel different at my workplace. After our friendship grew at the next level, I really did not feel that I was living in a completely different country. I felt like I was home. In addition, being surrounded by friends you feel safe. Although old friends usually give you that impression, it is actually proved that the new friends just make you feel the same. Because of this experience, I truly believe that new friends are as important as the old friends.
Second of all, making new friends is better because it would spark a great interest and curiosity on you. People who are able to make new friends in nature are curious and like the diversity. They want to learn and share their experience with others. For example, three weeks ago, I met my new friend at the Toefl exam center, she shared her experience with Toefl, so that sparked my curiosity to learn more about her experience with Toefl. After a couple of meetings, we now help each other to improve and expand our knowledge, so we could accomplish our goal to pass the exam. If I had not met my new friend at the Toefl center, I would never have learned about her experience, which I really founded interesting. According to this, people should value new friends the same as they do their old friends.
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Hello, I have a question…
Hello,
I have a question. What is the reason that this essay did not score 24 out of 30. Are the examples not efficient enough or is because of the grammar errors ? I would appreciate if someone answer back.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, if, really, second, so, for example, i feel, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1822.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53233830846 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45481429339 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460199004975 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 545.4 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.530651854 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2173913043 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4782608696 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313463533667 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105604572685 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0784855263481 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240692787673 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445635244474 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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