Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertisement is one of the most controversial fields in marketing. It can have a big impact on the final result of the sale, and do this by bolding the product. In my view, Advertisement try to say that the product is good enough to pay for it, and for obtaining this goal try to show the product as good as possible.
First and foremost, advertisements want to help producers to sell as much as they can, so they are not telling the truth always. The most important reason why companies and producers use Advertisement is to show their products to prone customers, and it may sometimes force them to add some lies. This point is obvious especially in low price products which may not have appealing appearance. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Last summer, Adidas introduced a Sneeker which I really wanted to buy. The price of the product was 500$ which was a lot for me as a person who lives in a developing country. Just some months later I saw an Advertisement of that product which was a fake version and a Chinese companies had produced that. When I watched the Advertisement , I thought it is exactly like the original version, and I can buy it for just 100$. I ordered the product, and when I received it, It was not as they showed in their Advertisement . When I called the company, they just told me that they cannot show the real product in Advertisement . After this unsuccessful shopping experience, I decided not to trust Advertisements, and that is why I think there are always some lies in each Advertisement .
Second, Advertisements want to encourage all people to buy the product, and it is achievable just by exaggerating about the product. People are really different, and each personality type has a unique favor, but Advertisements always try to persuade all people to buy the product, and it is possible just by bolding the product. If we take a careful look at different Advertisements, we will realize that they always try to deliver this feeling that their product is made exactly for us, and it is the feeling which all the people will have when they watch different Advertisements. To obtain this goal, Advertisement companies try to show the product much better than it really is. To bring an example I can mention my brother. Last month, he watch an Advertisement of a handsfree, and thought this product is exactly the thing which he wanted. Some days after when I watch that Advertisement , I thought this product is good for me too, and however, I knew my brother and I always had different opinion about a good handsfree, but I ordered the product too. I believe this was due to the effect of Advertisement, and that is why I think all Advertisements try to sell products to almost all the people.
To sum up, the role of Advertisement on the success of a business is plain as day. They always try to bold positive features of products and by not mentioning to negative ones sell the product in a high rate. The bottom line is that almost all Advertisements try to show the product much better than what it really is, and there is no blame, because it is the duty of them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually not used at the end of a sentence.
... can, so they are not telling the truth always. The most important reason why companie...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$500'.
Suggestion: $500
...ed to buy. The price of the product was 500$ which was a lot for me as a person who ...
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Suggestion: ,
...d that. When I watched the Advertisement , I thought it is exactly like the origin...
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Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$100'.
Suggestion: $100
...inal version, and I can buy it for just 100$. I ordered the product, and when I rece...
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Suggestion: .
...ot as they showed in their Advertisement . When I called the company, they just to...
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Suggestion: .
...t show the real product in Advertisement . After this unsuccessful shopping experi...
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Suggestion: .
...e always some lies in each Advertisement . Second, Advertisements want to en...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'watches'.
Suggestion: watches
... can mention my brother. Last month, he watch an Advertisement of a handsfree, and th...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...ys after when I watch that Advertisement , I thought this product is good for me t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, really, second, so, i think, in my view, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2578.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62007168459 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92271901996 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412186379928 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 16.0 1.86738351254 857% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8172100801 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.12 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.32 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198518582732 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703015899599 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363006101453 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141077650943 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185998934213 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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