do you agree or disagree with the following statement? most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Advertisements are today displayed everywhere we go such as on streets, buses, and so forth. We are surrounded and affected by them. Advertisements are fundamentally created to appeal to the people; therefore, I strongly agree that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
For one thing, advertisers want us to believe that their products are the best among lots of the same products, so as to convince us to buy them. There are lots of products on the market and the competition between the producers is being harder and harder every day. That is because after the industrial revolution, mass production made the market saturated and the products were more than people's needs. Thus, to have an edge over the other manufacturers, people started to talk about their commodities and eventually created advertisements. For example, there are hundreds of cooking oil producers on the market and to be honest most of their products have the same features. But when advertising, they try to say that their specific oil is different from the others and will not contribute to obbesety or heart attack. You might believe this claim and hence choose this specific oil among the others.
There is also the fact that we do not really need many of the things that we buy. As mentioned above, the mass production resulted in the number of products that were more than the number of peopele. So they had no other way than convincing the people that they need the product.I have observed this many times that people buy something and then they ask themself why they did this. For example, a girl sees an advertisement about a useful cream that can make her skin brighter and her face more beautiful. In the advertisement they depict a woman that attracts the men and is very successful. So the girl will unconsciously be convinced to buy the cream. After some months without observing any change in her skin, she will understand the truth but it is very late and the producer has won the game.
All in all, I think the advertisements not only try to make products seem better bu also make the customer to buy them without even needing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, really, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for example, i think, such as, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1785.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79838709677 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72945054498 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524193548387 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.780505102 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1666666667 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292507402353 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828716202139 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114461563171 0.0737576698707 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200222876095 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0961979382641 0.0645574589148 149% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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