Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most business people are motivated only by the desire
for more money.
There is no doubt that money has a pivotal role in every businesses. In this regard, some jobs are established without considering money as a motivation for further steps in their business, others, including me, hold this view that money is a great incentive to make dreams come true. I feel this way for two substantial reasons, delving into in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin with, we should not forget that the most important part of a business to run, is money. In better words, there should be so many fascinating areas about producing a product, however, without money, they are just ideas with no practical and objective results. Take my cousin, he was really brilliant at agriculture at the university. He managed to create a formula for fertilizer less harmful to the environment. Although, his discovery was really novel and pioneer, he could not find any economic sponsor to provide enough capital for mass production of his finding, logically, to be more profitable. Finally, he did not receive enough grants for his finding. Had not he gotten enough money to start a company, he could not have made his dream come true.
Second, money is crucial not only for founding a business but for future improvements in jobs. To clarify, the more companies and offices make money through introducing new products or services, the more they would survive in the competitive business environment. Otherwise, they would fail to amount their rivals. presenting ideas that is not kept the pace with the current evolution of the specific business, would cost much and the company would not recover itself. For instance, among digital cameras, presenting a camera with the instant printer is a terrible idea because all people prefer to save their photos and memories through social media. The idea may be reasonable at first, however, the company should consider losing money.
To sum up, money is a crucial material not only for founding a business successfully but there should be cautious to introduce products not for its sake, for remaining company to continue its job in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 315, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Presenting
...they would fail to amount their rivals. presenting ideas that is not kept the pace with th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, for instance, i feel, no doubt, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1743.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02305475504 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67014662465 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582132564841 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.9910341859 48.9658058833 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.529411765 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4117647059 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236201691397 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739073999967 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.060871357432 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141802228556 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286932645089 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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