Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.
Investment for a company, as we all know, is the most controversial debate among experts. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, one may find this contention sensible. In this regard, many people support this opinion that spends money on improving the work skills of employees is the most important investment of a company. Contrary to common belief, I believe that other crucial factors should be considered for investment. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.
The first reason which makes me hold this belief is physical evidence and interior design. Undoubtedly, visual elements can balance the environment and improve it. Based on an examination which had conducted, I have read an article about recently; results showed that when the workplace design correctly so that employee feels positive feelings, shows not only better efficiency but also her interest to self-job improvements increases. In fact, it seems that work skills can be derived from circumstances.
Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the management setting, which needs investment. Although there are many debates that one self-interest determines the willingness to improve work skills, critics challenge this idea and suggest that if there is an appropriate management setting installed in a company and assign employees to a suitable job, the results will be significant. Take one of my personal experiences as an example. When I was a student at university, I needed a job, and as soon as a job offered to me, I accepted it. It was surprisingly odd when I understood that the company just focus on a person who did not expect a high salary, and it pays no attention to the applicant’s psychological characteristics. The result is obvious; the numerous unsatisfied employees feel no dependency or interest in their job, and their productivity was noticeably low. Although the company had many skilled employees, unsuitable positions made them unsatisfied. So, in an unappropriated position, even skillful employees cannot help the company. Unfortunately, I have heard that the company felled apart a few years after, although it was apparently expectable.
To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we can safely conclude that although common belief is toward this opinion that the best investment for a company to improve is spending money for employees, it is obvious that there are other remarkable factors that need investment. Without a shadow of a doubt, based on psychological evidence spending money on interior design will provide company employees who improve themselves automatically. Moreover, the management setting which assigns people to the right job is worth investment too.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2322.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41258741259 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16451402606 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554778554779 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8933103375 48.9658058833 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.571428571 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.85714285714 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21732840038 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613803617805 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701695369421 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143539268146 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0632575742616 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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