Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important things people learn are from families.
Once humans are alive, they are learning. Learning from their families, from their friends, from their colleagues, even from themselves, their own experience. In my opinion, people usually learn the most important things from their experience and others instead of their families. There are two reasons why I feel this way, which I will explore in the following essay.
First and foremost, humans usually understand themselves from the process of getting along with others, and they can realize how society works and how to deal with interpersonal relationship by other people. Besides this, families usually are more tolerant to their relative. For instance, we can know what we like and dislike from interaction with our peers. If someone treat me rude, I will know I should not do it to others since I know how the feeling is. On the other hand, if I am impolite to my parents, I may not think that is improper behavior. In short, people spend most time with people who are non-related, and there is dramatically different between the way to communicate with families and to communicate with friends or coworkers. Thus, the things people can learn from their families sometimes is limited.
Moreover, the most important things we learned are usually from our own experience since everyone has different background. There is a saying, “only the wearer knows where the shoe inches.” My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. The most impressive things I remember is my first travel experience. Since I had never been abroad before I first time went to Japan, my mom was worried about me. She kept giving me some advice and telling me her experience, such as which hotel I should book and which flight I should take. Afterward, there was a typhoon and I could not go back because the flight was canceled. To deal with all problems, I managed where to stay and how to catch the next flight. Hence, I think the most important thing I learned is from my own experience because only I know the situation at the moment and only I can figure it out. Consequently, families may stop me from doing something because they want me to avoid failure, however, people usually learn from the mistakes and the problems in daily life.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that the most important things we learn are not from others instead of my families. This is because there is higher chance that we learn from our friends or even strangers. Additionally, what the most important thing to everyone is different and we usually can only learn from our own experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are usually
...by other people. Besides this, families usually are more tolerant to their relative. For in...
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Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'treats'.
Suggestion: treats
... interaction with our peers. If someone treat me rude, I will know I should not do it...
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Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ort, people spend most time with people who are non-related, and there is dramatically ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in short, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2146.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88838268793 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66503513964 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473804100228 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8594885564 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3043478261 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47826086957 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337338181947 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10295019815 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0906766249977 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227866836587 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0215527004297 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.24 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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