Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Finding a secure and desired occupation is always considered as a crucial problem for many people during different times. Some people think that it was easier in the old days than today to determine if a career can lead someone toward success or not. While, some others believe that this fact have not changed dramatically over time. In my view, nowadays, it is so complicated to understand any job's potential to make anyone successful due to two main reasons.
First, many factors can affect a career and its capability of leading anybody to a better future. In the past, employers just demanded the employees to fullfil a specific task and if they could mange to perform it right, their position was almost gaurenteed. However, now, numerous parameters like employee's innovativeness, creativity, contribution in related assignments and attitude toward customers can alter their way in making sure that this is the perfect job which can secure their future. For example, my friend, Jim, used to work in a dining hall and he assumed that he can easily become a master chief there in a couple of years, since his father did the same job and promoted to managing partner in a restaurant after a couple of years. In contrary, he had not even assigned to a bigger branch after five years. When, he asked his boss about the reason about his situation, his boss mentioned that it is different now and we pay attention to many detailed factors in order to put the best person in the most suitable position.
Second, there are a lot of different occupations present in today's market that it practically becomes hard for job seekers to identify if this is the appropriate job for them that aligns with their interests completely. For instance, I always liked to work in a chemical lab and I finally found a job in a petrochemical company. In contrast, when I attended the job, I recognized that in spite of the fact that they mentioned in their advertisement that they need someone who can work in a lab environment, they wanted a business analyst who can predict the new chemical products price that were synthesized in the company. So, I came to understand that today’s careers can not easily decide the answer to the question that is it the perfect job for me or not.
In conclusion, it is important for people to know if their career is the best option which can guide them to success. This decision is becoming more difficult in recent years because of numerous reasons like the job owners higher expectations and jobs expanded definition from a specific skill.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...can lead someone toward success or not. While, some others believe that this fact hav...
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...k and if they could mange to perform it right, their position was almost gaurenteed. ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
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... However, now, numerous parameters like employees innovativeness, creativity, contributio...
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Suggestion:
...at they mentioned in their advertisement that they need someone who can work in a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, second, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, in my view, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81941309255 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72945663143 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546275395034 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.7166272942 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.4375 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6875 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145816936316 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489982341938 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384078375239 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0915898018181 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0098283714457 0.0645574589148 15% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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