Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People’s nuclear families may cast strong influences on young people’s decision-making. However, I believe that young people today are more in control of decisions made in their lives than young people in the past.
First, young people today are less reliant on their parents financially. Nowadays, most countries offer compulsory education to people at affordable prices, allowing almost everyone to get some education. And the qualifications and academic certificates they get in educational institutions would give them better chances of passing job interviews. Hence, allowing them to have jobs that could support themselves. And they could therefore have the money to pay for the things they want, instead of asking their parents for help. However, people in the past might be unaware of the importance of education or could not afford to go to universities. So, many of them were illiterate and could not find decent jobs. As a result, many young people had to receive monetary aid from their parents, even if they become adults. And if they wanted to have this money, they would not dare to offend their parents who are paying for such money. Therefore, young people in the past were less able to decide on their own lives than young people today for monetary reasons.
Second, the social structure allows young people to live away from their families, reducing the influence of their parents. Typically, many young people would go to universities away from their hometowns, seeking better educational resources or novelty in a city they like. When they graduate, they would likely stay in the same place and find a job there because they have spent most of their adult life there and are more familiar with this city. Also, their social connections are mainly in that city, meaning it would make sense for them to stay there if they want to keep those social contacts. The result is that their parents would not live with them, making it hard for the parents to exert influence on young people’s decision-making. Yet, people in the past did not have many choices about where to live. Many would spend their entire life in the place where they grew up, and sometimes even living with their parents until later into their adulthood. This intimacy made it much easier for their parents to offer guidance to their children, affecting their decision-making.
To conclude, young people today are more able to make decisions about their lives than young people in the past because they are economically more independent and live away from their parents.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2145.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04705882353 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56118052365 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465882352941 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8422376943 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.142857143 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2380952381 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435993946282 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165548096356 0.076458572812 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121237459441 0.0737576698707 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.341073109429 0.150856017488 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0484644654966 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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