Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Throughout history, parents not only provided their children with a supportive environment to live in but also tried to nurture them appropriately. One of the most challenging topics on which there is no consensus is about the dependency of children on their parents. Opinions are divided into whether in the past youths decided independently, or they are more independent currently. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that adolescents and youths have more freedom in order to choose arbitrarily. To support this, there are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following essay.
First and foremost, these days, young people are interested in learning and cultivating their knowledge conspicuously. This leads to a higher number of graduate students and eventually prospers society. As a result, most of the students surpass their parents' level of expertise and become superior to them in cognitive and intellectual ability. This contributes to being less reliant on their parents and stands on their feet. Take my personal experience as a compelling example of this. A couple of years ago, my father persuaded me to attend a university and broaden my horizon; then he shared his own experience that when he left school and college, he became noticeably dependent on his parents because they were strict and as my father had abandoned the school, he was not able to recognize the true decision. In consequence, he was almost dominated by my grandfather. Had I not started university, I would not reach this level of independence.
Another worthwhile reason to be mentioned is that with the growth of technology, people have been seeking new ways and job opportunities to being paid. When an individual finds a new job, he/ she is not going to count on his/her parents' financial support anymore, and become independent financially is a decisive factor in one's improvement and flourishing. Without a shadow of a doubt, when a person's budget stretch enough to afford a product, he/she can make his/her choice whether to purchase it or postpone it for a better time.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in detail, it is a foregone conclusion that young people have more authority to perform as they desire. The fact that they are highly educated, coupled with an influx in job positions, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ent financially is a decisive factor in ones improvement and flourishing. Without a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, so, then, while, in summary, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03787878788 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94601094044 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573232323232 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.5788181618 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.833333333 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204672197375 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561270889125 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0464503597529 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107328375229 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.01442169531 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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