Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Owing to the epoch-making innovation of computers, numerous aspects of our lives have changed. Presently, youth have access to a variety source of information throuth the internet, which has give them the ability to be more independent than before. In my opinion, today, young people have the chance of finding their prospective future, and making their decisions more independent than in the past decades.
First and foremost, by rapid growth of technology, parents become aware about how it is crucial for their children to give them some degree of autonomy. In fact, social media plays an efficacious role to inform people about many changes that youngesters need in their lives. One of the different part of youth' life with their ancestors' is that they have a good deal of knowledge about various subjects and this awareness could not deal with any limitation. My personal experience is a compelling example of what I mean. I've had access to the internet since I was sixsteen years old. By means of reading articles about better life and having high-quality facilities, in the internet, I was ecgouraged to immigrate to a country with better condition to live. At first, my parents opposed me, but after my persisting on my decision, they gave up. I made my decisions on my own, because I was able to compare facts and reach to a outcome whitout my parents' help. This example demonstrates how nowadays, young people become capable of making decisions indepententally.
On the other hand, considering the past decades, shows the lack of information and insights that people had. In this case, the only way to make an acceptable decision was to consult with other experienced people. Therefore, parents had a striking role on their childrens' future. For instance, my father describes her life and he believes that his parents forced him to abondon their city and search for job. He regreted about their effect on his life, which if he could have the opportunity to make his own decisions, his life would be different than now.
To recap, I firmly believe that in the peresent time, youth have the ability to make decisions without any help because of the great effect of the internet on their lives. Conversely, in the past, young people were depended on their parents to decide about their life's paths.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, first, if, so, therefore, as to, for instance, i mean, in fact, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95629820051 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68315202498 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537275064267 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 611.1 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.995844642 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.473684211 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345842403971 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107797331635 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852954717811 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231054358811 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380067658443 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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