Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As modern life keeps developing, traveling has been more attainable than before. In my opinion, I believe that traveling abroad is more useful than internal trips. I think this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First of all, traveling to different countries broadens our knowledge. AS we are visiting new destinations, we will explore other cultures and gain information about them. This will help us to know what is out there. For instance, a few years ago, we as a family had the chance to receive good offers to go on trips with a professional company. The company offered us internal and external trips to select. After a long discussion, we choose to visit France. We entirely enjoyed our trip to France. The two weeks were completely useful as we know nothing about the french culture. After the trip, my son acquired a lot of information about France. When He had to work on a project about other cultures. He managed to cover the project easily.AS he already had a live experience about the country.
Secondly, When we go on a trip we look for a change to remove life's routine. Therefore we need to go to different places other than the country we lived in our entire life. We will get to try a vast amount of different lifestyles which will eliminate the boredom we encounter daily. For example, My sister visited Thailand two years ago. They had enjoyed her adventure a lot, as she tried the authentic Thai food, and she had a tour on top of a huge elephant. When she came she was delighted by the exploring thing that she never has the chance to do it before. She told me that being in different places other than the ones she used to inspired her a lot and flourish her soul.
In conclusion, I believe that traveling outside our own country is more useful than internal traveling because it broadens our knowledge about the other culture and also it is more fun and eliminates dullness.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ired a lot of information about France. When He had to work on a project about other...
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Line 3, column 77, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...k for a change to remove lifes routine. Therefore we need to go to different places other...
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Line 3, column 460, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e had a tour on top of a huge elephant. When she came she was delighted by the explo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62028985507 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59352432223 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524637681159 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1301881516 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.4545454545 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6818181818 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127806796593 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403798051839 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.062655529927 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122344415336 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830257568981 0.0645574589148 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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