Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People communicate with each other less than in the past because of the popularity of television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Throughout history, television had different roles in people’s life. Several years ago, our grandparents watched it as a news source, however, nowadays, we consider television as an entertainment source, and we spend a lot of time in front of it. Therefore, some people believe that because of television people communicate with each other less than in the past. I concur with this view, and in the following, I will elucidate my rationale by advancing two reasons.
First, nowadays, television has become so attractive, therefore we spend time on it instead of speaking with our families and friends. There is a myriad number of amazing TV shows, moves, cartoons, and documentary movies on the television, as a result, we need a lot of time to watch them, therefore, we prefer to scarify the time that we should spend being together with real people. For example, a recent study undertaken by the University of Tehran showed that people spend 50 percent of their free time watching television. For instance, my parents are crazy about tv shows. They prefer to watch some kind of silly television shows instead of listening or speaking to me.
Second, by spending time watching television people have not enough time to do some activities that connect them. People can do exercise and different physical games to communicate, but they choose to watch tv. For example, I remember when I was a kid, my grandparents had some kind of exercise schedule. They had a passion for sports, and this passion made them get involved in society and speak with other people, but my parents have not time to do exercise, therefore, they spend hours in front of their dear TV, and they don’t have good communications even with their neighbors. This example shows how because of television people are alone.
All in all, television had a serious effect on how people get lonely because they watch innumerable attractive TV programs, and they prefer to spend time for tv instead of getting involved in the activities that socialize them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1695.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.769099312 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516224188791 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1025748802 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181554107668 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0806622027129 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102699363159 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127079476891 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784706927551 0.0645574589148 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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