Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
I agree with the statement that computer games are wasting our kids' time. Electronic games do not promote kids' physical or psychological abilities. The games also have many side effects and encourage violence.
First, computer games suppress kids' physical and psychological skills. Kids spend a long time on screens as they keep playing electronic games. Therefore, kids will not practice sports or play outdoors. Also, these games cause a kind of addiction to the screen. Kids will tend to play a longer time than the previous session. For instance, my nephew is ten years old. He was a great lover for outside activities like biking, racing, and hiking. Once he started playing these computer games. All outdoor activities have stopped. Then he couldn't stop playing until sleep time. His physical appearance is worsening by time, and his psychological dependence on these games caused him anxiety.
Secondly, Computer kids enhanced the prevalence of some diseases, such as ADHA. The attention-deficit syndrome diminishes kids' attention and causes deterioration in their academic progress.
For example, as a pharmacist, I noticed the high number of prescriptions for ADHA medications. When I talked with some pediatricians, they confirmed that most kids with this syndrome are playing computer games more frequently. When I spoke to the kids' parents, they complained about their kids' struggles in school. Moreover, The harmful side effects of these medications that kids have to take forever will create more health problems for them later on.
Finally, computer games promote violence, especially in kids. Most of these games have scenes show kids that violence is fun.
The battles scenes and using gun machines are prevalent in electronic games. When kids are exposed highly to these severe actions, their subconscious will perceive that killing and harmful acts are enjoyable. For example, To win in most of these games, kids need to kill their opponent on the screen. Therefore, the killing will be desirable in kids' minds. Consequently, we can see the high number of the school shooting, and it keeps going up. Kids could convert into criminals by the violence they practice in these games.
In conclusion, I believe that computer games are harmful to kids. These games promote violence and suppress their physical and psychological abilities. Therefore parents should ban these games and replace them with other age-appropriate toys.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, finally, first, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2069.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36010362694 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8013088855 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525906735751 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.4706376421 48.9658058833 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 66.7419354839 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.4516129032 20.6045352989 60% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61290322581 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.53405017921 154% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178576763596 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570004260089 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065013022029 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100606050847 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0663726481418 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 58.1214874552 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.92 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 10.002688172 45% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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