Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them.
Nowadays, playing computer games is an essential Issue among parents and experts in the world. I think children should not be play computer games. I will illustrate my reasons for this issue.
Firstly, Computer games have a terrible influence on the children's minds because; there are many scary characters in the computer games that their shapes are like a monster. Sometimes, children cannot distinguish between reality and imagination, and it is harmful. These games also increase the children's level of violence and change the children's' behavior in the long run. For example, my nephew was playing computer games a lot, and it changed his behavior. He was angry if someone disagrees with him, and he shot his toys. Also, he had some nightmares that they did not allow him to sleep. So, his parents toke him to a consular, and he started therapy.
Secondly, Playing computer games make children lazy. Children don't exercise and spend most of their time in front of the computer, which hurts their health in the long run. Also, Computer games are a significant threat to society's children's' lives because they spend their time in the house instead of going out and playing with other people. They do not know anything about some concepts like cooperation. They connect with other people hardly, and they do not have a real picture of society's life. For instance, my brother was addicted to play computer games, and he was at the house most of the time. He could not connect with other people, even with other children that were not the same as him. He did not have any close friends until college, and my parents worried about him.
In sum, playing computer games is inappropriate for children because; it hurts their minds and bodies. Also, computer games change children's behavior and create some negative actions in them. Actually, being violent and dissociable are two main bad aspects created by computer games in the children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1613.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94785276074 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42626402581 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.524539877301 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.804581838 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.8095238095 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5238095238 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351730752814 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115514694223 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909301862868 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239117659963 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305292785096 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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