Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Primary school teachers should not give children (aged 5-10) assignments for more than 30 minutes, because there are enough lessons to learn in regular school
classes.
With the labor-intensive economy diverging into the education-focused economy, the importance of proper education in recent decades has substantially amounted. In order to keep up with all this pressure, students are forced to devote more time to their studies, and primary school children are no exception. That young students should devout less time for homework has constantly been a contentious issue. Some people hold the conviction that primary children should not be assigned a great amount of workload to deal with at home, whereas others have an alternative notion and perspective that students should get used to doing a lot of homework from a very young age. In this regard, I agree with the former group for several reasons that will be delved into more profoundly in the following paragraphs.
To commence with, young students are at the beginning of their educational path, and they have to linger on this path for at least 12 years just to acquire a high school diploma. Putting students under significant pressure can overwhelm them and even disheartens them to the point that they may want to quit school. Since these children are young, they are not armored with the skills and experience to cope with the debilitating stress of doing much homework, nor do they have the time management skill to find enough time to do them all. Hence, all of this can bring them nothing but disappointment and poor performance. For instance, there was once this particular primary school in my hometown called genius school. All the parents were trying to get their children into that school to provide them with the better education facilities that this school provided. However, one of the downsides of this school was that this school tended to give students a sizeable amount of homework regardless of the children's young age. Although children were exposed to better education opportunities and state-of-the-art technology, they had to deal with a significant amount of pressure and stress, which in return tired students and had adverse effects. To cut the long story short, this school was closed after a decade of work when it was realized that most students who studied at that school performed poorly in the following stages.
Furthermore, young children have a limited focusing time span and are inclined to lose interest in anything very early. In fact, it is their nature to be occupied by a varied range of activities in a short span of time. Hence, expecting them to sit for prolonged hours in a sedentary manner and be involved in such a tedious task of doing homework can not be sensible, and this inactivity, especially after having to spend several hours sitting in the classroom at school, can be really frustrating for children. Children should be engaged in other recreational activities such as playing, spending time with their parents, and doing physical exercises for their intellectual level, to enhance. For example, by painting or playing baseball, children can improve their hand-eye movement coordination and, as a result, their intellectual level. Also, spending time with their parents can help them adopt better social skills, which can be of great assistance in their adult life. A skill that cannot be obtained by merely devoting time to schoolwork.
To recapitulate, due to children's innate nature of having shorter time span of focus and the necessity to enhance children's to enhance children's intellectual level or different social skills through mundane activities and play, assigning a lot of homework can not be plausible at this stage. In addition, burying students from a young age with many assignments can not bring positive feedback in the long run. Had it not been for all the time we had spent playing with our toys and mate or interacting with our parrents, we would not have been able to acquire all the required skills for adulthood. Who can ignore the impact of play on children's development?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a sedentary manner" with adverb for "sedentary"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...pecting them to sit for prolonged hours in a sedentary manner and be involved in such a tedious task ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, so, whereas, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 104.0 52.1666666667 199% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3307.0 1977.66487455 167% => OK
No of words: 652.0 407.700716846 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07208588957 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05314661074 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78066554095 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 313.0 212.727598566 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480061349693 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 999.0 618.680645161 161% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.1938903752 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.28 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.08 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.96 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227068513404 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0736525561468 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513787289847 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153096697528 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559106853172 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 86.8835125448 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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