Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an indisputable fact that since human dawn, enacting rules in order to have control human-being behaviors, is one of the essential steps towards developing a civilized society. In this regard, some people approve of this idea that nowadays young people are under obligation to adhere to extremely tight rules. Conversely, others hold the opposite point of view. Personally, I concur with the latter group for a couple of reasons substantiated as follows.
To commence with, in the recent era, democratic societies based on freedom of action, empower young strata of society to obey less strict rules. To delineate, in the past, societies tend to comply with tight rules enacted by the king or the tyrant administrator of governments. On the contrary, modern society adopts a democracy based on the indirect collaboration of every people of society on legitimate rules for their nation via selecting the designated candidate for enacting regulation. To put in a more vivid picture, nowadays young strata of society are capable of the opting young candidate who has the power to legislate law in favor of youngsters. In this vein of thought, a young administer of government comprehending youth issues and mindset incline to advocate youngsters' rights and concerns and consider them before enacting rule. As a result, juveniles are exposed to less strict rules to follow in today's world.
The second worth-mentioning reason that comes to my mind is that nowadays people who comprise society and governments are remarkably more open-minded in comparison to the past. To cast light on this, the advent of technology and social media give rise to exposure of youngsters attitude and mentality for other strata of society which transform their mindset from traditional outlook into more compatible and consistent with the modern social norms. In addition, in the recent era, governers who legislate laws are high caliber people with an academic degree leading to expanding their horizons by gaining real-world experience and precious knowledge in the academic environment. Accordingly, meeting these elements culminate in broaden insight into juvenile issues and attitudes affecting positively on governers for enforcing the rule in favor of young people and society for the expectation of following these rules. Thus, the more expansion of society horizons about young strata of society, the less restriction and stringent rules to obey by youngsters.
To draw a conclusion, I strongly proponent the idea that in today's world, young strata of society have more convenience in abiding by the rule. This is owing to the reason that not only does the democratic society with the young designated governers enact laws in support of youth, but also the broaden mentality into the juvenile mindset and attitude modify enforcing laws and expectation of society for obeying the rule.
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...the essential steps towards developing a civilized society. In this regard, some ...
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...of youngsters. In this vein of thought, a young administer of government comprehending ...
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...nact laws in support of youth, but also the broaden mentality into the juvenile mindset and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, conversely, if, look, second, so, thus, in addition, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2423.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30196936543 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85609375223 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501094091904 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.283868512 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.529411765 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8823529412 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256919064254 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892499360362 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553997357407 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169797627219 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545900589698 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 58.1214874552 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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