Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an indisputable fact that education is the pillar of society being thriving in its development path. Taken this into consideration, the governers allocates tremendous fund in order to improve the educational system. In this regard, some people approve of this idea dedicating budgets to the education of very young children is more beneficial in comparison to universities. On the contrary, others hold the opposite point of view. Personally, I concur with the former group. I substantiate my standpoint as follows.
To commence with, children at the age of five to ten years old are receptive to learn fundamental skills and abilities. It is crystal clear, to have a prosperous society, every person should train how to represent a principle social human manner including responsibility, conscientiousness, and establish constructive communication with other human-being. In this regard, these social norms should be learned from formative years in which the brain is capable of embed this concept completely and exert its influence on behaviors in the future. Accordingly, children at a younger age who establish their mindset, are in the most vulnerable time to be influenced by both fallacious or orthodox. Therefore, the crucial step in respect to having a successful and developed country is dedicating budget to their education in order to provide opportunity and sufficient learning material for them to teach them how to bear the responsibility, improve their interpersonal skill and be the more lucrative person for their society, into the bargain.
The second worth-mentioning reason that comes into my mind is that the children are building block of society whose fresh mind for absorbing new information could have resulted in yield high income for country. To cast light on this, the galloping expansion of technology compels governments to come up with new technology and harness it to achieve a more developed country. In this vein, should the government invest money in learning the basic skill and competencies needed in technology such as computer programming to children in the age between five to ten who have sponge-like brain absorbing new knowledge substantially faster than adults, the society will take full of advantage of this investment by nurturing accomplished and the expert person who can enter to job market without imposing an extra cost to the government for teaching basic skills after entering the job market. by the way of illustration, Japan considered one of the global technology leaders. train computer programming, fundamentals of mechanics, and robotics. by doing so, they achieve a breakthrough in the technology field at highly competitive international job markets and are placed in the top ten high-income countries. Thus, allocating money to train young children for being versatile and competent in a technology-based world, is more beneficial for developing society and yield more income by having high caliber workforces.
To draw a conclusion, I advocate the notion that governments should allocate budgets to the education of children from the age of five to ten years old. By doing so, Not only could society take full advantage of having the responsible and resilient person in the work environment and in contact with other people, but it also utilizes an accomplished and talented workforce in the fast-paced technology-based era in order to have a more developed country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, second, so, therefore, thus, such as, by the way, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 52.1666666667 176% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2900.0 1977.66487455 147% => OK
No of words: 541.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36044362292 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82280071112 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20148194473 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506469500924 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 912.6 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.435126868 48.9658058833 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 145.0 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.05 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240137942901 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662544699005 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602947977992 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142429841634 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0244471057647 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 11.7677419355 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 86.8835125448 170% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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