Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
In the modern life, people try hard for being prosperous in their job based on different preferences. Some people find studying hard in school as a secure way of being prosperous; however, others believe that having better communication skills can help us for being successful in our occupation. In my own perspective, I think the relation with others is the most crucial part of success for two major reasons which are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First of all, the initial step of being successful in our job is the ability to attain an appropriate career. In other words, famous companies have made numerous barriers for applicants to get a job such as various entrance exams and interviews. If we want to get a good job in these firms we should be perfectly prepared. For instance, five years ago when I was sending myriad resumes for a huge number of incorporations, I was finally invited to attend an entrance exam. I was happy at first because I have known that how I am strong in my own field, computer engineering. Hopefully, I could become the first rank in that exam because of the high hours that I had spent at universities for my courses. The next part was the interview and I confidently attend to show my characteristic and experiences which I attained during my studying. Conversely, I was not able to even to get the job due to the low communication skills. The last one in the exam who was invited to the interview could win the job because of some small points that he knew about how to introduce himself as a perfect sophisticated engineer. Therefore, it was a valuable experience for me that studying hard will not guarantee the future jobs and other issues like relationships play a more important role in this regard.
Secondly, just getting a job cannot be named as a success, we should try to promote in our career which is strongly dependent on the ability to our relations. If a person is in a fixed position of a company but cannot be promoted to a higher level, he will not feel like a successful man. My older brother has a compelling experience in this field. He graduated with the first rank in his university which was the best of its type in our country. He could finally find a job just because of being in contact with one his professors. However, he was still in the same position after 10 years of being in that company. I totally know my brother's character and he also gives credit to my knowledge, that during working there he was just concentrating on his own responsibilities that were assigned to him. In contrast, he was not able to communicate with his managers and also coworkers; therefore, they thought that my brother is just capable in doing certain duties like a robot and is not skillful enough to be promoted in a higher position. This story really helped me to find out that the relationship with managers, customers, and colleagues must be my first preference.
In sum, it is obvious that I do believe the relations are more important than any other issues for being successful in our job. That's why we should improve our social ability
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... various entrance exams and interviews. If we want to get a good job in these firm...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...issues for being successful in our job. Thats why we should improve our social abilit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 15.1003584229 219% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 550.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66545454545 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84273464058 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83636130536 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492727272727 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 810.0 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.963980463 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.916666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9166666667 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.20833333333 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176526874041 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561079978308 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603458902002 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145640128381 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655953076773 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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