Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard at school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are a lot of debates about whether to be well-educated in a job circumstance or to be sociable. Because each of these abilities is so crucial and plays a pivotal role in everyone’s success. While some people prioritize social interaction as the most important pillar of being successful. However, I strongly believe that being well-educated will have a myriad of benefits for individuals who want to be prosperous in their job career. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, I do believe that it is undeniable that education is a prerequisite for having lucrative communication skill. In other words, a majority of people who are literate and have higher education will be equipped with social interaction ability because this kind of people will interact with so many students, professors, administrator, and other people in the universities. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was a student in my hometown I was supposed to do my thesis that it was in the field of specific research in nature so I had to get permission from some related organization. As a matter of fact, my communication skill was enhanced during that period.
Second, people who study hard will have wonderful opportunity for being hired by employers. Nowadays entrepreneurs are willing to employ workers with a solid foundation in special field since it believed that being mastered in a particular scope, the avenue of success and productivity will be open not only to the person but also to the company and corporation one works for. Employers have an opinion that students with a better educational background will be able to lead their company to the prosperity and reach its fullest potential more expeditiously. Consequently, I firmly believe some students that haven’t been employed must have a weak resume and if they had studied hard in universities, they might have had a job.
In conclusion, people who have a strong foundation in their university field not also are sociable and able to build potent connection with their colleagues, customers, but also will be employed in a prestigious firm with high salary.
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Suggestion:
...in a prestigious firm with high salary.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, second, so, well, while, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, as a matter of fact, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1847.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07417582418 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12289537872 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.79534868 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.133333333 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2666666667 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0666666667 5.45110844103 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158420542165 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571828450605 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0244000304247 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959407993305 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265280079295 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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