Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are many factors to become successful in a future job. Nowadays some people hold the view that studying hard in school play a key role to find a successful job, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that the ability to communicate well with people is much more important. From my own perspective, the second belief is true, in what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that one of the most important factors to become successful in a job is finding a desired career that is compatible with our skills. I have witnessed that many people with the ability to solve scientific problems that could not find an appropriate job since their social circles were limited and hence they have to select their job among limited choices. In contrast, I know a lot of people who were middle students during their studies, but they can achieve high positions in their career because of their strong social relationships.
Another reason which deserves some words here that communication with different people help us to broaden our different experiences like team working that are essential to be successful in a career. According to research conducted by one of the most reputable universities in Iran showed that 70% of big companies prefer to employ graduate students from middle-rank universities. Because, they believed that one of the most important requirements for an employee is to build up a tight relationship with her/his colleagues, bosses and clients. And also their experience demonstrated that most graduate students from top universities as a member group are not able to work harmoniously and cooperatively together.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the ability to communicate effectively with others is a more important factor to have a good job compared with education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, well, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1724137931 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90625537411 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570532915361 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.5919083153 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.0 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205769390282 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787298997076 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679604431454 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132370509245 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523051966928 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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