Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people may hold the view that taking a risk and trying new things play a key role in reaching success. However, some others may take an opposite viewpoint and believe that it is better to plan carefully. From my own perspective, the first belief is true. In what follows, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this issue that taking risk provides an opportunity to discover our talent. For example, when I was child and I wanted to learn swimming, I was very scared of water. However, my teacher motivated me to jump in the water. After a while, it turned out that I have a special talent for swimming so that I could win several swimming competitions.
Most of people believe that taking risk can lead to failure and therefore they prefer to stay in their safe zone, although this point of view is true, people with this opinion should consider the fact that risking and even failing gives us some valuable experiences that empower us and pave the way to achieve higher positions. A report from interviews with top 50 entrepreneurs conducted by one of the most reputable universities in Iran shows that 70% of them have experienced several serious failures during their career and these failures have provided the basis for their future success.
The last but not the least reason is from a psychological standpoint, when people try new things, they are rarely depressed. Because the thrill of experiencing new things break the everyday monotony. Imagine how exciting it can be to travel to an unknown land with so many cultural differences. Also, it is able to enter us into a world that we did not notice before.
From what has been discussed, we may safely reach the conclusion that taking risk has a lot of advantages. In other words, trying new things compared to having a constant routine has more positive effects on our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind substantiating'.
Suggestion: mind substantiating
...easons. The first reason coming to mind to substantiate my standpoint is concerned with this is...
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Line 5, column 209, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to swim'.
Suggestion: to swim
... when I was child and I wanted to learn swimming, I was very scared of water. However, m...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
...win several swimming competitions. Most of people believe that taking risk can lead to fa...
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Line 13, column 126, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... new things, they are rarely depressed. Because the thrill of experiencing new things b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, for example, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1624.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8622754491 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63117785791 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595808383234 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.6126011361 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.875 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.3125 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184504586873 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549501405035 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510226412788 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101889598515 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0320523467272 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.