Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Successful people are extremely hardworking and pursuasive thus they are detemined to do
whatever they wan tot achieve. There are many factors to be considered to become a successful.I firmly believe that they are always try out new things and take risk rather than doing the same thing they know. I will expalin the reasons in tthe following passages.
First of all, famous and successful person are never afraid to do new things. They explore on their quest to do new things and the journey teaches them a lot of new things. As result of this, they end up getting the best that suits them and they fall in love witht it. Hence, when people love doing certain tthings, it becomes passion and they build their passion has a career thereby they become successful. My uncle is the perfect example of this situation. My uncle is now a renowed businessman. Few years back, my uncle struggled in sittting up the business, he tried multiple times, but he never succeed. A few years after that he went to China, he took risk of going to the place which he have never been. There he leraned about various market stratigy and returned back to our homeland with a solid idea. That is to set up a totally new kind of market and to import all the things from China. After that he succeeded his business. He have many employee working under him now. Had he not taken the risk to go beyond his limits, he would have never got an idea to his business.
Secondly, taking risk and trying out new thing is not an easy task to accomplish. Success doesnot just appear like that, we have to work hard to it. Taking risk educate us multiple things like getting to know about many new things like learning getting exposed to the new cultures, adopting new habits, tring out to learn new things. Taking risk becomes the most impoartant. For instance, when i first came to United States, I couldnot speak english properly, I had trouble writing down words. But afer few days of stating home, I learned that if I just stay home like a loser, I wouldnot learn anything, so i took the risk of first exploring the city then i went to library nearby. I signed up there for language class. I learned for english leanguage for continuesly 6months. Despite of me, being afraid to expose to new environment, I forced myself to walk in the city alone. After few years of staying here, I have learned opened a bakery shop in the main city. My exam clearly shows that if i havent taken all these risk to step out myself in world and expose to new people, I wount have l earned the success that I have reached right now.
In conclusion, i firmly beleive that successful people try new things and take risk to stay out of their comfort zone than just doing the same things that they know. Because, it take them on a journey where they can learn and try out new things to find their love of interest and trying out new things and help them to be successful intheir own way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pursuasive thus they are detemined to do whatever they wan tot achieve. There are...
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...many factors to be considered to become a successful.I firmly believe that they are always t...
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Suggestion: I
...to be considered to become a successful.I firmly believe that they are always try...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tried'.
Suggestion: tried
...l.I firmly believe that they are always try out new things and take risk rather tha...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
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..., he tried multiple times, but he never succeed. A few years after that he went to Chin...
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Line 4, column 696, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
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Suggestion: has
...ook risk of going to the place which he have never been. There he leraned about vari...
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...raned about various market stratigy and returned back to our homeland with a solid idea. That...
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...nd to import all the things from China. After that he succeeded his business. He have...
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Suggestion: has
...fter that he succeeded his business. He have many employee working under him now. Ha...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to get'.
Suggestion: to get
...now about many new things like learning getting exposed to the new cultures, adopting n...
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...ish properly, I had trouble writing down words. But afer few days of stating home...
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... a loser, I wouldnot learn anything, so i took the risk of first exploring the ci...
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...e risk of first exploring the city then i went to library nearby. I signed up the...
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...ew years of staying here, I have learned opened a bakery shop in the main city. M...
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Suggestion: haven't
...n city. My exam clearly shows that if i havent taken all these risk to step out myself...
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Line 8, column 179, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
...same things that they know. Because, it take them on a journey where they can learn ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2409.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 538.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47769516729 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27441023481 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486988847584 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 729.0 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3911185727 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0689655172 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5517241379 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68965517241 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282180319893 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752916821176 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879780128226 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20745904905 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723034920544 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.