Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Television advertisings have been one of the most controversial topics in all decades. They can easily make a deep influence on people's mind, especially children and that is why we must think a little bit more focused on them. In my view, television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed and I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
First, most of the times, television advertisings do not tell the truth. One of the most obvious charactristics of young children (aged two to five) is that they trust everything they see or hear and because advertisings do not always tell the truth, it is better not to use them directly toward young children. Whenever a young children see an advertising in television, he thinks that the reality is exactly as is said by advertising and when realize that people have defrauded him, it will be a big disapointment which leads to this issue that he will not trust to others anymore. last year, when I was in an office waiting to see my professor, I saw a young children staring at the television which was showing an advertising for toys and suddenly he said: "You are all liers. I have this toy and it is not as you say, I do not trust you anymore," and then he left his toy there and came to his mother while crying. In my view, losing trust about advertisings is something that can happen for adults to, but when it happens for a children, it can have worse effect on him.
Second, young children cannot decide wisely. One of the things which make advertisings useful is this point that they can help us to make our mind about the things we need and choose between different options. But, young children cannot think properly and choose the product which is the best for them. When we see and advertising, we can know properties of that product and after knowing about different choices, decide which product may be the best for us. In my view, young children cannot analyze different aspects of products and they just choose based on the appearance of products. So, it is not good to persue children to buy some products which may not be good for them just because they have nice shape or apearance.
To cut the long story short, all I want to say is that, viewers of advertisments are really important and it will be better not to let companies to make advertising for all ages. why so, in some ages, like two to five years old children, who are potential consumers of specific products, have a lack of clear decision making and also advertising may make bad influences on them too. That is why I believe television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, so, then, while, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2240.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64730290456 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6454682179 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458506224066 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.6648092394 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.444444444 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7777777778 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295476864153 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114190026817 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120136926615 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205799922336 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739492305337 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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