Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The family is one of the most important parts of each society and if we have good families, we can ensure a good society. It is all because family is the first group which we face and learn so many things from its members. Some people think it is important to have an extended family which all family members like grandparents, cousins and other family members are living together and think we still need to live in a big family like this; while, others believe these days big families are needed less and having a big family is not as important as it was in the past. In my view, extended families are now less important than before and I would like to elaborate my opinion with following reasons.
Firstly, people's attitude toward family has changed. Some decades ago people liked to live together as a big family and it was really important for them because they could work together and overcome problems easier, but today's people's opinion has changed and they prefer to live alone or in a small family and it makes the importance of big families less. For instance, when I was six years old, my whole family and I were living in a big house as a big family with all my cousins, aunts and uncles. Elders used to work together on our farm and it was a big help because we could have more fun during our work and it was easier to earn money by working as a team. But as time passed, all of us changed our attitude toward living together and preferred to separate and live in smaller houses far from each other. It was exactly the thing which happened for some of my friends too and I believe it was based on a trend in people's opinion toward family which made people pay less attention to big families and declined the importance of extended families.
Secondly, life's cost has increased. Each day we see that inflation in all societies increases and makes the cost of living really more than before which can lead to preferring smaller families in all societies. As time passes, some members of family cannot work anymore and they will be just consumer, also based on this point that the life's cost has increased in a crazy way, active members of a big family cannot afford the cost of a big family's life and this problem forces them to live as a smaller family. To bring an example, I can mention to my own family one more time and say that when I became twenty years old, my father and uncles got retired and did not have the ability to work as hard as they did in the past. It was while all the young members were really busy with their schools and universities and did not have time to work. Also, prices and cost of living were increased and we could not even pay our bills, so our family faced to a big financial problem and that was one of the main reasons why we decided to separate and live as some small families. I am sure it was something which happened to lots of families and forced them to break into smaller families and even prefer to have fewer children.
To cut the long story short, we cannot cast any doubt on the importance of family and living by all family members, but based on presented justification, my conviction is that the extended families are less important now and we see less and less big families every single day. We can even predict that this trend will continue in future as well and we may even see people who are living alone and even do not marry in the next few years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a crazy way" with adverb for "crazy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...point that the lifes cost has increased in a crazy way, active members of a big family cannot ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 41.0 13.8261648746 297% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2783.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 636.0 407.700716846 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37578616352 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02185627292 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22376354472 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396226415094 0.524837075471 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 913.5 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.8075564954 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.473684211 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4736842105 20.6045352989 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78947368421 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197520576162 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738110570136 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589304957292 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144167263238 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387235392244 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.72 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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