Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There was always a complete debate between students, professors, advisors, and managers that where money should be allocated to the sport and social activities as much as classrooms and other academic thing or not. In my perspective, I do believe that sport and social activity are as important as other academic issues. 24
First of all, If you begin doing exercise, you will feel better and will perform your tasks perfectly. Before doing something valuable, you must feel excellent. I mean if you want to be successful in your study and work, you must have been calm. For instance, when I was at university studying electrical engineering, I had no time and was always in the libraries just work hard on my research programme. On semester, I have 20 credits and also a difficult project, I was completely disappointed to pass all of them and do the project. But, one of my friend, Jacki, helped me to attend to the football team of the university because he knew me from high school that I used to be a perfect goalkeeper. After all, We started to practice with university team and finally we won some games. In addition, I got A+ for all my credits at the end of the semester and my project was completely in line with my professor attitude. I think attending to that football team helped me to feel more comfortable and rested, as a result, I had done perfect into my studies.
Secondly, the goal of all studies and working are to provide a good life. Health is the most essential part of our life that must be under special consideration. Without being healthy, nothing is important for us; money, study, research and other purposes are just for the sake of being prosperous in our life and the crucial part of success is being healthy. My own experience is an appropriate example of this theory. 2 years ago, when my brother was in the middle of studying computer engineering in Boston University, I realized that he suffered from overweight and backache. Due to the general format of his work, he must always sit on the chair, looked at the computers. Therefore, after some years being in this situation he had some trouble with his back. As I remember from my previous experience, I advised him to start doing sport. I convinced him to enroll to the swimming class at the university, consequently, after just six months he lost weight and his problem with a backache disappeared. It was just because of the university sports classes and we found them so helpful.
In sum, I do believe that sport and social activity are as essential as classes, books and libraries. with doing sport and social activity, we will feel rested and we will be healthy in both physical and intuitive mode. That's why I suppose money should be allocated to these two type of programme at universities in the same way as other academic issues.1.30
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Suggestion: With
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Suggestion: That's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, after all, for instance, i mean, i suppose, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2349.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71686746988 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73979850773 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510040160643 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4627510209 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.875 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195372112978 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588956521019 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438567963804 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13105697604 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199749376488 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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