Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As people regard education as quite significant in life more and more, where the educational budget should be devoted is usually a hot topic. Some people hold the view that financial support should be concentrated for improving facilities like classes and libraries while others have the notion that an equal amount of capital should be allocated to sports and social activities. In my perspective, games and social life coupled with classes makes a campus life perfect, so I think these activities are to be given considerable priority in terms of capital investment.
To begin with, games and sports help to ameliorate the pressure and stress with which students often struggle with during their college life. As people upgrade to higher classes more and more, they are often endowed with obligation to write many assignments, term papers and project reports. The only way to keep them motivated is by encouraging them to involve in games. For instance, if a student is interested in playing football, during the game he does not thinks about all the works that he needs to complete. As a result, it helps to refresh his mind. Enjoying sports not only helps to manage the stress, but also improves the mental function by improving cardiovascular activities and bolstering our immune system. All things considered, such activities have positive impact on student’s mental function.
Besides, social activities provide students with unique opportunity to learn new things which they do not learn in classroom, namely, interpersonal skills like communication, team work and respect. For example, if university decides to conduct an environmental cleanliness campaign, students are encouraged to form groups and each group is supposed to perform different tasks. This way, students really get a pragmatic perspective of how it feels to work in a group. In addition, they also learn how a group can be coordinated and managed while doing any job. On one hand they learn to respect each other, while on other hand they learn to feel morally obligated towards protecting and conserving our environment, society and community.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments aforementioned, it is reasonable to believe that universities and colleges should indeed allocate equal amount of their capital to foster games and social activities as well. This is mainly because it helps students to become mentally fit and also they can learn valuable qualities of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, if, really, so, well, while, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, as a result, by the way, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25757575758 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87467365054 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573232323232 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9722443892 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.470588235 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2941176471 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153929628535 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445483006848 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0536562227269 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0959722998924 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428527808114 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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