Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
In today's constantly connected world, the world is changing at a rapid pace because of the actions of human populations. As the population increase, the personal problems of each individual increase, so they do not pay enough attention to their society. The issue of improving society by helping each person has always been a controversial question among individuals all over the world. This matter can be considered from different aspects so that one can get new insights into this issue. While some people think the problem of improving their society by helping each individual is not as crucial as another problem they face in today's world, such as poverty, global warming, economic recession, human trafficking and other problems like these, I am inclined should humans pay enough attention to their communities, all of these problems will prove virtually. The following paragraphs will illustrate my perspective.
First and for most, in today's modern and advanced era, all humans and especially young persons have a considerable number of personal problems, such as time-consuming works and education. They always work as much as possible and have a heavy-work load to earn a living in this advanced era. I do believe that were they to consider their society as important as their personal duty, they would not only do have a beautiful society and also country but also can improve their personal performance. Should they improve their society, they will get numerous advantages parameters from their advanced society.
Furthermore, I think this element should be considered as a cultural problem. Each family should learn and talk about the importance of individuals in their society. If families learn this vital element to their children, they will not only be familiar with this significant element but also have a better society which helps them to have a better lifestyle and fate. I think the government can influence young people’s behavior as much as their parents do, so states should consider this crucial element in their country. Should they learn about the considerable influence of each person on his/her society, they will not only can improve each individual lifestyle but also have a successful country. Although it may take an age for the realm and parents to learn this important element to young people, it makes the odds against the cause of many problems.
In conclusion, I am in agreement with the above statement, and I do believe that young people do not pay enough attention to their society. As they have a considerable number of personal problems, they cannot consider this element. It is crystal clear that in this regard, governments and immediate families can help them to learn about their considerable influence on society. All in all, should young people consider this important element, they will not only have a more advanced society but also can do their personal duty as beneficial as they do earlier.
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Suggestion:
... duty as beneficial as they do earlier.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, while, i think, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2472.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13929313929 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7462932848 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428274428274 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7897218416 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.6 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.05 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.1 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190408602989 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072422037577 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088831157806 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143390690599 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635776999758 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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